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May 21st, 2022, 03:01 PM
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Constructive Criticism
So, I’ve been working on the world-building for my book for around . . . 2-3 years, and I think I’be filled any holes or inconsistencies. However, I would really appreciate some feedback, as I am hoping to have it published by the end of the summer. So, would anyone like to offer some constructive criticism?
Update: I am still adding to the Terminology section.
Update: Added the Lore
The World building
Last edited by Willow_Tree; May 22nd, 2022 at 01:34 AM.
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May 21st, 2022, 03:15 PM
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Re: Constructive Criticism
:0 i love it so far!
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May 21st, 2022, 03:16 PM
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Re: Constructive Criticism
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:0 i love it so far!
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Thank you! I’ve been working really hard on it. 
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May 22nd, 2022, 02:39 AM
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Re: Constructive Criticism
great, but theres a small thing. You said they can only comunicate through body language and telepathy. you also said on thier naming ceromony they announce thier new name. if they cant talk how do they anounce thier new name? @ WingedShadow
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May 22nd, 2022, 02:42 AM
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Re: Constructive Criticism
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great, but theres a small thing. You said they can only comunicate through body language and telepathy. you also said on thier naming ceromony they announce thier new name. if they cant talk how do they anounce thier new name? @ WingedShadow |
They do the Naming Ceremony in their human form. Only adults can leave the flock unattended, and so they show their human forms during the Naming Ceremony do their flock members can recognize them if they have to use it again.
Thank you for pointing that out, I’ll add it to the doc.
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Re: Constructive Criticism
oh that makes sense! I love how well though out this is! @ WingedShadow
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May 22nd, 2022, 02:48 AM
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oh that makes sense! I love how well though out this is! @ WingedShadow |
Thank you! As I said before, I’ve been working on this for about 3 years, so I’m really hoping it’s all good.
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